2019年4月11日星期四

Need help checking the essay

Greetings to this wonderful little community :) I am a third year Chinese language student and as my home assignment, I had to write a piece about a prominent Russian historical figure (I chose Pyotr the First) . It would be terrific if someone proficient would read through it, pinpoint any grammar mistakes/unnatural word choices/general clunkiness and suggest how they would have paraphrased it. Apologies in advance for (supposedly) terrible Chinese. Without further ado, here's the composition:

我想形容彼得一世, 一位非常有名俄罗斯的国王。人人通常称他为“将朝欧洲的窗口砍穿的人”,因为他的改革、世界观和思想既进步又自由。他的改革包括军事、宗教、经济、文化、商业的改革等等。可是,我觉得他最有影响力的改革就是教育的。他提倡了大众教育的观念、从而在他的保护之下许多学校被建筑了。此外,他的战役扩大了俄罗斯的领土。除了这些事实以外,他的形象也非常有特色。例如说,他的个子为2米,比普通人异常高。他吧胡子当作野蛮的特征,所以为了消灭留胡子的传统而收了留胡子的税。还有,为了惩罚酒徒,他想出了迫使他们带一个极重的奖章,以免坐牢吧这个奖章一秒也不准脱下。他其实是一位历史人物、整个俄罗斯到处都有彼得的纪念碑、献给彼得的博物馆、画。总的来说,彼得一世对俄国历史的影响很深刻、伟大。

submitted by /u/Widderschynnes
[link] [comments]

from r/ChineseLanguage: a community for people who are studying, teaching, or interested in Chinese! http://bit.ly/2P10ncG
--------
More tips about learning Chinese
http://hellolearnchinese.com

没有评论:

发表评论

Time-lapse: Beautiful cacti bloom before your eyes

from New China TV https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LWntHYtd5Vo